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05 December 2007 @ 10:55 pm
Harry/Draco challenge  
Title: Honeymoon in Kansas

Author: lijahlover

Team: Aurors

Word count:100

Pairings: Harry/Draco

Challenge: corn

Warnings: none

Betaed by no one: All mistakes are mine!



Harry and Draco are walking hand in hand in a field of corn. They love looking at the sun shinning on the fields.

Draco turns to Harry and says,"I am glad we listened to Hermione and came to Kansas for our honeymoon,it's so very different."

Harry turns toward Draco and kisses him urgently. "You know" says Harry,"We have to make love in the corn field before we leave."

"What a brilliant idea," says Draco, as they begin to kiss,Harry asks"Who's going to be on the bottom?"

"Not me!" They both say at the same time.

End
 
 
Jaeenchanted_jae on December 6th, 2007 08:54 am (UTC)
*laughs* They'll have to flip an ear of corn for it, or something.
lijahloverlijahlover on December 6th, 2007 02:43 pm (UTC)
Yes!They will good idea!
Silyara: mad eyesilyara on December 7th, 2007 04:03 am (UTC)
Just a beta note: the first two sentences begin in past tense and you switch into present tense. You should always have only one tense! (Unless you're breaking it VERY purposefully and such and it works well...which this situation is not). You can choose present tense, but that said, I'm a person who believes past works better. You're telling a story. It happen-ed. I think it just reads a bit better that way. It's still happening as the reader reads but...easier tense for reading.

That said, LMAO. Cute.
lijahloverlijahlover on December 7th, 2007 04:17 am (UTC)
Thanks! I have the worst time with tenses I never know I'm switching them.That is why I pleaded for a beta.
lijahlover: Shreklijahlover on December 7th, 2007 04:18 am (UTC)
Buy the way I love your icon.
fivelostlovers: masked kidfivelostlovers on December 7th, 2007 04:24 am (UTC)
Well I'm a tenses person. I watch them carefully. An easy technique with drabbles is to read them out loud (actually out loud at regular volume) to yourself. Then you can catch things (like if you're trying to make it all past tense, etc).

:)